tailieunhanh - outlinging essay 3

Tham khảo tài liệu 'outlinging essay 3', ngoại ngữ, anh ngữ phổ thông phục vụ nhu cầu học tập, nghiên cứu và làm việc hiệu quả | CBEST MINI-COURSE There could be a comma after Instead at the beginning of the fifth sentence. This comma may not be necessary in some circumstances but you are changing the flow of thought here and you want the readers to know it. Instead you feel a sense of belonging. The sixth sentence contains a compound sentence that should be set off with a comma. The last sentence could also use a comma to separate a long clause from the main sentence particularly since you are once again switching gears. Lastly don t let the fact that you re almost done make you forget to put a period at the end of the last sentence. You are less distractd by cumparing your clothes to others so you are more apd to be relaxed and queiter in school. This enables them to learn more. Children might be happy with the school uniform policy but not as happy as their teachers and principals. Identity Disorder Keep the same person throughout the essay I and me or you or they and them. It is all right to address the reader with a question but the facts and statements should match each other. In the paragraph below the subject of the first and third sentences is children. You need to continue to talk about children in the third person throughout the paragraph. Not only are parents happy to see a uniform policy in place but their children benefit as well. If you were poor wouldn t you feel bad if you were not dressed as well as your peers Children who dress differently are usually alienated from cliques at school and left to feel like outsiders. Often they are teased unmercifully. Dressing in uniform eliminates that problem. Instead they feel a sense of belonging. They are less distractd by cumparing their clothes to others so they are more apd to be relaxed and queiter in school. The second sentence is not talking about children but is addressing the reader so it s OK to use you and your. The last two sentences talk about children not about the reader so those sentences should use they and their not .