tailieunhanh - Essential guide to writing part 12

It exists in the writing itself; it is the sum of the actual words, sentences, paragraphs. Strategy is more abstract, felt beneath the words as the immediate ends they serve. | For more material and information please visit SENTENCE STYLES 165 forgets the dull routine of army life by fantasizing a romantic adventure with the heroine Maybe she would pretend that I was her boy that was killed and we would go in the front door of a small hotel and the porter would take off his cap and I would stop at the concierge s desk and ask for the key and she would stand by the elevator and then we would get in the elevator and it would go up very slowly clicking at all the floors and then our floor and the boy would open the door and stand there and she would step out and I would step out and we would walk down the hall and I would put the key in the door and open it and go in and then take down the telephone and ask them to send a bottle of capri bianca in a silver bucket full of ice and you would hear the ice against the pail coming down the corridor and the boy would knock and I would say leave it outside the door please. Both Grahame and Hemingway use the freight-train sentence to describe an experience taking place within the mind. The style suggests the continuous flow of dreaming for we fantasize in a stream of loosely connected feelings and ideas and images not in neatly packaged sentences of intricately related clauses and phrases tied together by if but yet therefore consequently on the other hand. Indeed we sometimes fantasize not in words at all but in imagined perceptions as Hemingway implies and you would hear the ice against the pail . Hemingway also goes further than Grahame in imitating the mental state of fantasy his one sentence is much longer and its flow unimpeded by punctuation. This technique is a variety of what is called stream of consciousness a way of writing that suggests a mind feeling dreaming thinking in a loose associational manner. Multiple Coordination and Parataxis The Grahame Hemingway and biblical examples all use multiple coordination linking clauses by coordinating conjunctions in these cases