tailieunhanh - Barron's writing for the toefl ibt part 5

A good essay takes time—rime to plan y time to write, rime to revise. When you write your TOEFL iBT essays, you will have a limited amouni of time. If you take the time now to learn how to write, you'll easily be able to write your TOEFL iBT essays in the limited time allowed. | Introduction 25 Score 3 Topic 136 Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Playing a game is fun only when you win. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Some would like to play the game such as basketball tennis swimming and riding bike for exercises and fun. But some they play for their achievement. I agree that playing game is fun when we win. As a matter of fact when I was in High school I like to play basketball as my hobby. I was very excited when I won the game. All high schools in Cambodia they required students to choose one kind of game such as volleyball soccer basketball tennis and swimming. By that time I took basketball as my favorite hobby. My school gave me the best basketball coach. He had a lot of experience of training basketball players. My teams and I were trained by him everyday for two months. After two monthes of training My coach wanted us to compete with other schools. When the competition day came our emotion was combined with happy and scare of losing the game. But our coach encourage us. He told us that don t be afraid of your competitors they are as same as you so you have to have a confident in yourself. When time of competition of game started our coach led us to basketball court to get to know our competitors. The result of competition was my team completely won. My coach and our team were very happy to win that game. I believe that playing game is very difficult if we don t know a weakness of our competitors. We have to have a confident in ourselves. I agree that playing game is very fun when we win. Revision Checklist CONTENT Thesis Statement Topics that support the thesis Main ideas Supporting details FLUENCY AND COHESION Transition words Grammar and Spelling Sentence variety Content This essay is adequately organized and developed. It shows development of ideas and some facility with English. In the first paragraph and in the conclusion the writer states the opinion that playing a game is fun .