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Tài liệu Learning Express visual Writing PHẦN 10

Sinh vật nhỏ nhìn tôi và mỉm cười, sau đó ông đã nói một cái gì đó trong một số loại ngôn ngữ nước ngoài, được trong giới tàu của ông nhà và biến mất. Tôi không bao giờ nhìn thấy sinh vật một lần nữa, nhưng một số lần, thực sự vào ban đêm, tôi có thể thề rằng tôi nghe một người nào đó làm cho một bánh sandwich trong nhà bếp! | The little creature looks at me and smiles he then says something in some type of foreign language gets in his ship circles the house and disappears. I never saw the creature again but some times really late at night I could swear I hear someone making a sand-which in the kitchen SCORER S COMMENTARY In this Skillful response the writer wittily portrays the space creature whose primary interest seems to be in a peanut butter and jelly sandwich. There are some errors such as comma splices and the response does not provide details about the space creature or about the writer s own reactions as consistently or fully as the Excellent responses. 6. Sample Excellent Response Crash A noise awakened my midnight slumber. I looked about frantically wondering where the noise had come from. Another sound like gas escaping from a soda can. I leap out of the bed and dash to the window. Slowly I part the curtains to what I see almost makes me scream. Standing about 2 0 ft. from my window is an alien bathed in purple-blue light. It reminded me of an X-Files alien. At first glance I noticed its prominent black eyes large flat nose well-proportioned lips high cheekbones and small slightly protuding ears. It was also bald. When I looked at it more thoroughly other details come to mind. It looked to be about 5 7 with greenish-white skin and a strong and limber body. I can only guess as to what its real body was like under it s peach colored space suit. Slowly it raised its hand and waved to me. I wondered if I should wave back or not and decided to even though I was scared enough to turn and run screaming down the hallway but I waved instead. As I stood there waving like a fool I began to think really weird things. Things like Help me save reading and writing practice challenges 119 your planet and You must help me. On some subconscious level I realized it was communicating telepathically. I tried as hard as I could to reply to but found I could. Through our telepathic communication I